exquisite enigma

This is a section of my story. The next section coming soon.... I charged up the aisle , the beast hot on my heels. I could feel his breathe on ...

Wow, that had to be one of the best things I've read online in a while. Excuse me while I bow down to your amazing-ness (and yes I am full ...

I like it, but you should finish it, taking into consideration the others changes (in grammar). One thing I did notice, and that jabberhut did mention was this sentence: The ...